naaTok khub bhaalo hoyechhe. aamaar jete ekTu deri hoyechhilo, 4:55 te giye
pNouchhechhi.

khub-i dokkho prajojonaa ebong prochur haattaali poRechhe.

lekhaaTio besh paakaa haater; tabe oto lambaa hoye jaaoaate ekTu rasahaani
hoyechhe boley aamaar money hoy.

Detailed feedback:

1. bishoy-bastu:

-- naaToker bishoyTi aamaader jiboner bhishon kaachaakaachhi, kaajei taakey
nirliptobhaabe bichaar karaa mushkil. tomaader saahosher jannye obhinandan!

-- aamaar mate shilper sange baastober kichhuTaa durotto thaakaa uchit, jemon
sangbaadpatrer report-er sange ekTaa bhaalo galper.

-- naaToker doirgho praay 150 miniT. jadio dorshoker aagroho o koutohol dhorey
raakhte perechho, aamaar mone hoy ekTu beshi lambaa hoye jaaoaate rasahaani
ghaTechhe. eTaa puropuri imo, kintu bolchhi je palash-er baaRitey party-r
drishyaTi naTokey bishesh kono value-add kareni. jadio drishyaTi suparichaalito
ebang su-obhinito (charade-er onsghoTuku chaaRaa) ebang detail-er kaaj besh
bhaalo, aamaar mone hoy oTaa baad deoaa jeto.

-- baad deoaar aareTi candidate : ghumonto shishuputrer saamne dNaaRiye
nikhil-er dirgho swagatokti: khub osaadhaaroN obhinetaa chhaaRaa ekhaane
oti-obhinoy-er haat theke rehaai paaoaa mushkil.

2. obhinoy:

paramita: bhishon bhaalo; raag o obhimaaner drishye sangjato othocho tibro
          obhibykti aamaar khub bhaalo legechhe.

ruchira: eke naayikaa korey ekTaa hNaasir naaTok karo. khub bhaalo comic.

swagato: onek din dhorey aamaar khub priyo noT. taar obhonoy shokti niye kono
         sandeho nei. kintu du:kkher bishoy je ballabhpur-e ebong ei naaToke
         dekhchhi je kemon ekTaa mannerism ese jachchhey taar chalaaferaay,
         haabebhaabe o baachon bhangite jeTaa obhinoy-er kkhoti karchhe.
         manche jyaano swagato ke dekhchhi, charitro Tike noy. hoyto eTaa
         overconfidence, aami Thik balte paarbo naa; aamaar mone hoy or aaro
         cheshTaa karaa uchit charitro Tir bhetore Dhokaar.

rajkumar(?): (nikhil) besh saabolil obhinoy. kintu pagla ghoRaa-r mato-i
         baw-e shunno raw ke Daw-e shunno raw uchchaaroner praabollo sob
         maaTi korechhe. eTaa fix karaa dorkaar.
3. koyekTaa nit-picking:

-- dui mahaadesh-er dui poribaar naaToker paatropaatri: kintu ek-i design-er
chaa-er cup kyaano? :-)

-- jekhaane detail-er dikey eto najar deoaa hoyechhe ebong khub sundor sound
effect, aamaar mone hoy desher phone baajaar shabda-Taa je onno rakam seTaa
kheyaal karle bhaalo hoto. at least aamaar kaane dui desher phone er shabder
bhetor kono tofaat paai ni.

-- jakhan manch-er du-paash theke du bhaai phone-e kathaa balchhe, takhan je
ek jaaigaai din aar aarek jaaigaai raat, seTaa establish karte paarle bhaalo
hoto.

-- bibhinno ghaTanaar maddhye katoTaa samay paar holo seTaa bujhiye deoaar
byabosthaa thaakle bhaalo hato. bishesh korey jakhan duTo poribaar ruddho-
swaashe opekkkhaa karchhe. aami follow karte paarini nikhil-er airport-e
jaaoaar thekey baba-r phone aasaar bhetor kadin keTechhe. ekTaa daily
calender-er paataa chhNiRe diye baa sanglaape kichhu ingit thaakle bhaalo
hoto.

-- niloy-er deshi genji ebong briefcase: bhaalo detail-er kaaj!

ekTu beshi nindaamondo hoye gyaalo bole mone hochchhey bhaai, kichhu offense
niyo naa please!